tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post7097358885827756030..comments2023-08-27T07:25:11.735-04:00Comments on Project Write: Blog Post - Haley HutchinsonProjectwritehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00516514688775961518noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-47116927051475706842018-08-02T21:02:21.052-04:002018-08-02T21:02:21.052-04:00In just a few lines, I was transported to the cri...In just a few lines, I was transported to the crime scene. The words "visibly trembling" made visible just how hard it is to pull a gun on another human being even when your life is threatened. You captured the emotional intensity of the situation in your narrative. Great writing! I want to read more!Dwaffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15288327573186137540noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-12965115673309558692018-08-01T23:06:22.857-04:002018-08-01T23:06:22.857-04:00The first line of dialogue made me expect somethin...The first line of dialogue made me expect something totally different from what the story ended up delivering. I thought this was going to be a story about an intimidating arrest. Such a clever twist to surprise readers! The last two lines are my favorites because they set such an ominous mood and inspire so many questions--among them why the narrator is seeking revenge. Celestenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-12778216664184024572018-08-01T16:28:51.603-04:002018-08-01T16:28:51.603-04:00Good story. Right to the point. You feel like yo...Good story. Right to the point. You feel like you are there watching this all happen. You draw your reader into the scene as well as the story. Ouch I felt his face hit the concrete. Write more and more.jerrynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-38074507815391659792018-08-01T16:09:44.638-04:002018-08-01T16:09:44.638-04:00Hi Haley;
I must say that you have a gift for imme...Hi Haley;<br />I must say that you have a gift for immediately drawing the reader into the story. I can hear the Officer telling Zupkoski to put his hands up. I can also hear his insane laughter. I can see the blood dripping from his face. Please write some more.Ranger Larrynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-75080755072514581532018-08-01T15:57:45.944-04:002018-08-01T15:57:45.944-04:00Haley,
A gripping piece. It leaves me wanting to ...Haley,<br /><br />A gripping piece. It leaves me wanting to know more about Zupkoski and his 'plan.' This could be a compelling start to a longer story.Ranger Paulnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4334919750236935394.post-52247069685155174902018-08-01T10:51:19.826-04:002018-08-01T10:51:19.826-04:00Revenge is a wonderful thing, is it not?Revenge is a wonderful thing, is it not?Charles Tonettinoreply@blogger.com