By: Henry Ziegler
The Peacock sits in his lavish nest,
Preening his feathers, grooming his crest,
Convincing himself that we all like his tail,
Which truthfully looks rather mangy and pale,
Though he rules all the birds, he often forgets,
That the same rules apply to him as the rest,
He may think that he's better, but still he remains,
Skittish of character, lacking of brains,
The Peacock still sits in his limited nest,
He may look to the right, but never the left,
He believes what he wants, to win he will cheat,
He sits low in his nest, as he
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Hi Henry, I really like to be surprised by a poem, and yours really did that for me. I got the metaphor right away, but when you put the tweet at the end, it just all fit together thematically.
ReplyDeleteThe second stanza really sticks out to me as a reminder for us to look outside of ourselves and reflect.
ReplyDeleteThe repetition and placement of "tweet" at the end is powerful.
ReplyDeleteI echo the sentiments of the first three commenters but I had to add my own heartfelt "well done"! I'd like to hear more.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant.
ReplyDeleteLoved the rhyming scheme, so effective in mocking the peacock.
ReplyDeleteThe repetition at the end is very effective.
ReplyDeleteHenry;
ReplyDeleteI thought that your piece was very creative and I would like to read other metaphorical pieces that you have written.
Great job. I get the message and agree with you. You are a wonderful writer.
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery. I too like the repetition at the end which is not only rhetorically catchy- it is the key to understanding the metaphor- nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff, and an on target commentary on today's issues
ReplyDeleteLove the peackock analogy! Great writing!
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