Everything Left Unsaid
I hope…
where do I even begin?
I hope you didn’t feel any pain,
that you just drifted away like a feather in the wind.
Gently floating.
I hope your back doesn’t ache anymore.
No more waking up at night because of the soreness.
No more PT exercises.
I hope you get to take walks again,
wandering through nature without a care in the world.
No bothersome trick knee.
I hope you still have your little garden.
Do you still grow herbs and fruits? Maybe you grow flowers now.
Your strawberries are still my favorite.
I hope you’ve found someone to read with.
They better appreciate how much you glow when immersed a good book.
I wish we read together more.
I hope you’re not afraid of dogs anymore.
That you’ve met a nice puppy up where you are who melted away the icy fear.
I bet you’ll love my future dog too.
I hope you don’t worry about us too much.
Dad won’t burn the chicken again and Mom doesn’t lose her temper as much.
Me? I’ll be fine, too.
I hope you’re proud;
even when I’m not the obedient, ladylike granddaughter most people want.
Then again, you were never like most people.
Carrie- I want to tell you that your writing moved me and made me consider and reconsider the hopes I have for family members past. You have a delicately powerful way with words.
ReplyDeleteThis brought a tear to my eye. I especially liked the placement of the questions - "Do you still grow herbs and fruits?" and "Me? I'll be fine, too."
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I love the repition of the word hope and the title is powerful.
ReplyDelete-Betsy
Carrie,
ReplyDeleteYour blog posts displays several characteristics that make the story more impactful and detailed. I very much enjoyed this because as I was reading your story it made me imagine the character's feelings and emotions, along with their thoughts.
This made me very emotional because I just lost my grandmother a couple weeks ago. The line "They better appreciate how much you glow when immersed a good book" is beautiful and made me think of all the good wishes I have for people I know I'll never see again.
ReplyDeleteCarrie;
ReplyDeleteI was very much effected by your blog post .I also recently experienced the loss of a loved one and
When you state in the last Stanza,"I hope your Proud. Even when I`m not the obedient Ladylike granddaughter most people want. Then again you were never like most people." This was a powerful ending. great work!