Thursday, August 2, 2018

Blog Post - Gabriela Petit

You may not be able to see,
But the light within me shines bright. 
And though you can't see through me 
There is definitely a light. 

It was bright before,
But as I grew, the light dimmed. 
Look close within the door,
You'll see how much it's thinned. 

There is such a trail 
That shows me where to go. 
I hope to find the rest, to prevail, 
And live my life with its beautiful glow.

9 comments:

  1. I love the light metaphor. My favorite line was “You’ll see how much it’s thinned.” The word “thinned” was unexpected, and not normally a word you assoicate with light, but right away I got what you meant. Nice choice!

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  2. Your language beautifully communicates themes of humanity, strength, and resilience. I really like the symbolism that drives your message, "light, shine, bright, glow, life". Your choice of words evoke many emotions that raise issues of the human experience. Great writing!

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  3. Like your other readers, I was drawn to the beauty of your language. I was moved by the line, "the light within me shines bright." The light for me symbolizes hope, optimism, a sense of power. You powerfully capture what often happens to our inner light over time. The desire to "prevail" despite life's challenges is a wonderful way to end the piece.

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  4. There's something very calming about this poem; maybe it's because the structure and rhyme scheme remain constant throughout. The rhythm rises and falls in a way that's comforting. There's a quiet strength and determination in the narrator's tone, as if she is unhurried and completely confident in her ability to find the light. Very inspiring.

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  5. I like this idea of an thinning and thickening of light. It is true to life and hopeful.

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  6. You are an artist who paints pictures with words. I like the way you are going ahead with a goal.

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  7. Hi Gabriela;
    In writing your Poem you make excellent use of imagery. I may have missed the point but, I interpret your use of light as a metaphor used to describe the inner beauty and strength that we are born with that often times we miss in others. I especially liked the manner in which you ended your piece with the stanza that reads: "There is such a trail that shows me were to go. I hope to find the rest , to prevail and, live my life with it`s beautiful glow". What a beautiful Poem.

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  8. Gabriela,
    This piece expresses confidence, because of your certainty that this light exists. You also seem to feel there is a challenge to keep it. The message is a hopeful one, that you want to keep it going.

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  9. Gabriela,

    Your poem is beautiful and resonates on a number of different levels. It is very accessible to the reader and has meaning to young an old. Well done! It's certainly the piece I needed to read this morning!

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