Style , I very much enjoy the way in which you describe the desolation of a prison.especially the final sentence "at night you can`t see the stars" In one word, powerful! Please keep writing.
The ambiguity of how this description could be read as a literal description and at the same time as a metaphor makes this so evocative and want to know more!
What stands out to me about this piece is the vivid imagery. Something I would like to know more about is the second line where you mentioned "at morning nothing grows". That line was very powerful and I would like to know more about your perspective on that.
The first line, "Prison is a yard of broken, clacking bars.." invokes am immediate image of despair. That really stands out. You've said so much with so few words. Your word choice is intentional and powerful. That stands out as well.
I wonder if our trip today to Eastern State Penitentiary will inspire you to build on this powerful work.
ReplyDeleteStyle , I very much enjoy the way in which you describe the desolation of a prison.especially the final sentence "at night you can`t see the stars" In one word, powerful! Please keep writing.
ReplyDeleteA picture is worth a thousand words, and in this case, so are 19 other words. I must agree with Ranger Larry, please keep writing.
ReplyDeleteThe ambiguity of how this description could be read as a literal description and at the same time as a metaphor makes this so evocative and want to know more!
ReplyDeleteWhat stands out to me about this piece is the vivid imagery.
ReplyDeleteSomething I would like to know more about is the second line where you mentioned "at morning nothing grows". That line was very powerful and I would like to know more about your perspective on that.
The first line, "Prison is a yard of broken, clacking bars.." invokes am immediate image of despair. That really stands out. You've said so much with so few words. Your word choice is intentional and powerful. That stands out as well.
ReplyDeleteVery elegant!
ReplyDeleteVery elegant!
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