Solemn Evening
The solemn evening
People walking at leisure
Where social class mattered
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| The man living in the moment lives tranquil a moment in time |
Mourning
The sunset on a funeral,
Her wealth sprouts from her scalp and curls
around her neck
A masked grin from a mourning mother's face
I like how so much can be communicated with just a few words. I the first poem, that last line leaves an echo in my ears and makes me want to know more. I also really like the descriptive imagery in the second line of the second poem:
ReplyDeleteHer wealth sprouts from her scalp and curls
around her neck
--> it's nice to see this description without turning it into a simile.
Great beginning, but I want more. You are putting questions in my mind.
ReplyDeleteI must say that both poems wee striking in their ability to capture the emotions that have been triggered in both paintings. In the first poem the line that reads " with a calm read glow" adroitly captures the mood in the street scene. The same holds true in the second poem with the sentence"Her wealth sprouts from her neck and curls around her neck" Please share more with us.
ReplyDeleteI love how the students rewrote their stories based on their reflections and observations. Yes, please share more with us :)
ReplyDeleteI love how "Mourning" plays with contrasts, like how there's the image of warmth/light from the sun but the gloom/solemnity of a funeral in the same line. Also the idea of a grin from a mourning mother, which is a line that provokes as many questions as it answers.
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