This is a powerful short piece that really packs a punch. I agree the last stanzas really make you take notice and think. Thank you for sharing your writing!
I love how you took the image of a fireplace, which usually has a cozy connotation, and turned it on its head with your last stanza. Suddenly the fireplace feels like a symbol of privilege and inaction for the people who are enjoying it, and a symbol of oppression for the people fueling it.
It's so impactful that you make the reader wait until the end to deliver the punch.
I love how you distinguished those with power as the ones nearest to, or around the fireplace. It's such a simple but creative and impactful way to visualize the individual's appearance and status.
I also found this to be a very powerful piece.I thought that this is a very good example of what we learned at Camp yesterday on creating the micro-story , which helps us to look at the bigger picture,"Who really makes it happen"?
Your poem's brevity serves to punctuate the powerful statement you make. I got chills reading it and will be pondering it for a long time. I would love to work reading this into a tour one day - with permission and credit, of course.
Wow I love the last two stanzas. Super powerful!
ReplyDeleteThis is a powerful short piece that really packs a punch. I agree the last stanzas really make you take notice and think. Thank you for sharing your writing!
ReplyDeleteI love how you took the image of a fireplace, which usually has a cozy connotation, and turned it on its head with your last stanza. Suddenly the fireplace feels like a symbol of privilege and inaction for the people who are enjoying it, and a symbol of oppression for the people fueling it.
ReplyDeleteIt's so impactful that you make the reader wait until the end to deliver the punch.
There is a ton of power in that last stanza. Thank you for writing this.
ReplyDeleteI love how you distinguished those with power as the ones nearest to, or around the fireplace. It's such a simple but creative and impactful way to visualize the individual's appearance and status.
ReplyDeleteThis poem really reminded me that less is more. You created a lot of depth and power with very few words.
ReplyDeleteI also found this to be a very powerful piece.I thought that this is a very good example of what we
ReplyDeletelearned at Camp yesterday on creating the micro-story , which helps us to look at the bigger picture,"Who really makes it happen"?
Your poem's brevity serves to punctuate the powerful statement you make. I got chills reading it and will be pondering it for a long time. I would love to work reading this into a tour one day - with permission and credit, of course.
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